LO4: Revised Script

LO4: Email to Vicky Kilby

LO4: Meeting Minutes

LO4: Production Plan

LO4: Task 2: Analysis of Feedback

When Vicky delivered her feedback, we found the majority of her comments to be positive, with the suggestions for improvement being constructive and helpful. She was impressed with both the balanced dialogue between the two presenters in the script and the general detail we went into. Additionally, Vicky felt that all of the information was relevant and the amount of dialogue was appropriate for the television show.

In contrast, Vicky felt that the script could have been more "fun", as it seemed quite formally written in a similar style to the dialogue on BBC News, however she believed that regardless it would "fit in with the show". Therefore, to improve our script we shall modify our dialogue by adding in regional dialect and slang phrases to make the speech more informal and conversational. Based on Vicky's feedback we also need to highlight the local gaming scene, indie games and events in Sheffield, instead of purely focussing on International gaming news and technology. 

Overall with regards to improving our script, we are going to research and include information on local indie games companies such as Sumo and Rockstar. Also, we will change our dialogue by looking into stylistic conventions of other conversational news programmes such as BBC's Newsround to make our speech less formal.

LO4: Task 1: Script Feedback from Vicky Kilby

Today we gained verbal and written feedback on our script for the news section of The Games Corner, Episode One. We provided the presenter of the show, Vicky Kilby, with a series of prompt questions to help her tailor her response to regard elements of the script that are most successful, elements that are less successful and suggestions of improvements. 

"Strengths:

- Is presented well.

- Is easy enough for presenters to read and sounds relaxed.

Weaknesses:

- Is a little too bulky - Don't want viewers to turn off!

- Is straying a little from gaming into tech (Try to involve local news/indie games for future ref).

Overall:

I think that it is good, just be careful about straying too much away from gaming, for example you could cover indie games that are in development - I know of a few that are in Sheffield, cover future events that are in the UK i.e. Minecon, tournaments etc. Also be careful not to put in too much information - this is easily done but it could ultimately put a viewer off, try to make it not too serious and try to make it entertaining without being too cheesy!"

LO4: Peer Feedback for Blogs

Danielle's blog is really detailed however she still needs to complete LO1 Task 3 which is the comparison of the five example scripts she found. She must reference the websites where she found these example scripts. Danielle also needs to finish her "LO3 Style & Content" blog post as there is a heading but no text describing the function of sound effects. Additionally, she needs to upload the meeting minutes but has successfully uploaded her mind map and production schedule.